Moriah Leila

Very quickly: You said that Chapter two and three were glimpses into the past that would explain why Genna was being sentenced to death. But you really just gave us ...

oh yeah more to read!! I love it!! Quick suggestions (Yeah I have some!!): Jeff glanced at me, and Alyssa looked where I was curiously. Wording is weird. Perhaps, Jeff ...

Again I am too late, but I just had to give you my praise. We now understand why Genna pitys Jeff for having to stand guard..Bravo on that. Oohh and ...

GAH I was so excited because 1. I love this story 2. I had found something to critique of your work But alas The Fates are not fair. Everyone covered ...

I am just so impressed by your story. But it makes me sad to not have anything to critique, I feel like I should give you some sort of feedback. ...

Hey back again to review. I was able to read a few of the other's reviews but I am a tad lazy and skipped over sorsha's so hopefully I don't ...

I think this is a great beginning. Your plot is very strong and your characters are interesting. However, I would like more of a physical description of Noel and her ...

Wow, I really like this story. Very interesting and unique, nothing like any of the other fantasy stories I have read. And your characters are so strong and intruiguing. I ...

A very interesting start, although I had to go back through and reread it because I was a little confused. Maybe you could clear this up if you stated who ...

Hmmm. This story is okay. I don't see any real plot except that you talk a lot about how clumsy Clover is. There are quite a few cliches and the ...

Ok, this needs work. Sorry is that too blunt? I really like your characters, they are very interesting and your descriptions are good. You do write good descriptions of people ...

Again a great work. I don't think I have much to add except my praise. I love your characters, they are so strong and realistic. I also like how they ...

You are such a talented writer, I hope you know that. You have a very good sense of your characters and you bring them to life. I feel as if ...

Very intruitguing. I like it so far, very original, and I like the idea of the seven orbs. Also your characters are vey well developed and it is nice to ...

I like how you redid the fairy tale, it is always fun to have an alternate ending. As for the labor scene well I just wasn't all that satisfied with ...